Well done, Alice. This is a great set of pages. There's some tightening up to be done, but not much and, as I've said before, it's the attention to detail which will help cement good marks.
There's a very clear house style with the colours and the merging of texts and I think this works well. Remember to comment on your inspiration for this.
Make sure (P1) text doesn't butt up to the edge of the page - always leave a few mills of space. Also, consider how much of the masthead you're losing as a result of the image. It's not a big issue, but maybe experiment changing the size of the shot (slightly) to show a little more of the 'R'.
P2 is strong. Watch minor typos ('summer's' and not 'summers')
Set rules to make sure text lines up exactly (that's the attention to detail I was on about). Look at the L in LOUDER and make sure there's no 'step' between it and the box of 'contents'. Those steps are (usually) a design no-no. The same applies to the border of the picture and the text to the left. Make sure there's not any other similar cases around. (The same applies to all you who are reading this too!)
Baseline shift (where text on two lines is pushed closer together or pulled further apart) - make sure it's constant.
DPS. Also strong, but make sure you proof read. Alice is Alice, and not alice, for example. House style is one thing, but typos are another.
I know there's a house style with a lack of punctuation and grammar with the headlines and sell lines et al, but I think you need to make sure your body text is grammatically correct or else it becomes jarring for the reader.
Maybe consider the merging of characters (as in your front page) on the left-hander too, as this shows consistency of style.
Try experimenting with your diamond / square logo to break up the modularity of the text too - it may not work, but be wary of being overly modular when trying to design 'modern' pages.
Well done - there's a little more to do but, as I said, it's mainly tightening from here on in.
Well done, Alice. This is a great set of pages. There's some tightening up to be done, but not much and, as I've said before, it's the attention to detail which will help cement good marks.
ReplyDeleteThere's a very clear house style with the colours and the merging of texts and I think this works well. Remember to comment on your inspiration for this.
Make sure (P1) text doesn't butt up to the edge of the page - always leave a few mills of space. Also, consider how much of the masthead you're losing as a result of the image. It's not a big issue, but maybe experiment changing the size of the shot (slightly) to show a little more of the 'R'.
P2 is strong. Watch minor typos ('summer's' and not 'summers')
Set rules to make sure text lines up exactly (that's the attention to detail I was on about). Look at the L in LOUDER and make sure there's no 'step' between it and the box of 'contents'. Those steps are (usually) a design no-no. The same applies to the border of the picture and the text to the left. Make sure there's not any other similar cases around. (The same applies to all you who are reading this too!)
Baseline shift (where text on two lines is pushed closer together or pulled further apart) - make sure it's constant.
DPS. Also strong, but make sure you proof read. Alice is Alice, and not alice, for example. House style is one thing, but typos are another.
I know there's a house style with a lack of punctuation and grammar with the headlines and sell lines et al, but I think you need to make sure your body text is grammatically correct or else it becomes jarring for the reader.
Maybe consider the merging of characters (as in your front page) on the left-hander too, as this shows consistency of style.
Try experimenting with your diamond / square logo to break up the modularity of the text too - it may not work, but be wary of being overly modular when trying to design 'modern' pages.
Well done - there's a little more to do but, as I said, it's mainly tightening from here on in.